Comments on: Hell on $5 a Day - Chapter 12

By: bullfinch

bullfinch — Fri, 16 Jan 2009 18:34:11 +0000

coming along great! I'm very excited about venturing into hell. awesome line about the Greeks!

By: Greg Bulmash

Greg Bulmash — Tue, 13 Jan 2009 22:36:22 +0000

@Melvar: My wife particularly liked the line about the Greeks.

By: SA Kid

SA Kid — Tue, 13 Jan 2009 20:38:18 +0000

Great story. Reminds me of Frank J's style only not as off the wall. see Hellbender at http://www.imao.us

By: Melvar

Melvar — Tue, 13 Jan 2009 19:42:49 +0000

As said before, taking the established and warping it to be time-appropriate is excellently done here. Charon on a motorboat: hilarious. Paying him with a quarter: hilarious. Blocking off the tunnel because Greeks kept coming down it to rescue people: ludicrously, thigh-slappingly hilarious.

By: Rhan

Rhan — Tue, 13 Jan 2009 14:06:54 +0000

My personal Hell would be light on trees and ice, but involve a lot more Brittney Spears. Boy bands and "faculty retreats" too, I think. Fortunately for him, Dante didn't know about pop-rock or paperclips. I think I'd put both on the level which Shepherd Book reserved for child molesters and people who talk in the theater. Hopefully Kurt and Alain don't have to go through that one.

By: Greg Bulmash

Greg Bulmash — Mon, 12 Jan 2009 23:23:38 +0000

@Rhan: Mostly I went with Dante, though I put my own twist on it. I also give some levels more attention than others.

By: Rhan

Rhan — Mon, 12 Jan 2009 22:27:33 +0000

I'm liking Charon. Are you going to paint the rest as a Dante hell or a combination of different ideologies?

By: Benji

Benji — Mon, 12 Jan 2009 21:08:03 +0000

Great story so far. Keep those chapters coming!

By: Miladysa

Miladysa — Mon, 12 Jan 2009 09:11:26 +0000

Great interaction between Kurt and Charon.

Looking forward to more.

By: Greg Bulmash

Greg Bulmash — Mon, 12 Jan 2009 06:22:45 +0000

I checked it at 10:01, which is 12:01 a.m. on the 12th server time (the server's in Texas), and it was working. There was about a one-minute gap between the link going live and the page going live. Have to do the "next chapter" links manually. Perhaps you briefly cached the 404.

By: Big Daddy

Big Daddy — Mon, 12 Jan 2009 06:14:42 +0000

Think I'm the first one to read this chapter. It's 10:10 PM on 1/11. Been clicking on the "Next Chapter" link and getting a "404 Not Found" until just now. Can you speed it up. Tough to wait so long for each chapter. I'm sure Shakespeare wrote faster than this. Good story and writing, so far, though.