Comments on: Hell on $5 a Day - Chapter 30

By: Greg Bulmash

Greg Bulmash — Wed, 18 Mar 2009 06:11:25 +0000

Suggestion taken and implemented. Thanks.

By: Greg Bulmash

Greg Bulmash — Fri, 13 Mar 2009 23:47:57 +0000

It's something I've thought about. Because Azrael is not always considered the angel of death (sometimes Michael, sometimes Gabriel) and there's no actual biblically named angel of death, I used Thanatos as a placeholder while I figured out what name. Anyone who knows who Thanatos is will immediately think "Death." Azrael may well be a better choice, and that particular bit is not set in stone, but I'm still thinking about it.

By: Alex

Alex — Fri, 13 Mar 2009 12:21:40 +0000

The only thing I haven't liked in this story is the use of Thanatos (Greek myth) instead of Azreal (extrabiblical Angel of Death). Throwing a minor Greek god in with a bunch of Archangels is very distracting. Not sure how 'set in stone' this story is, but you may want to reconsider this.

By: Andrul

Andrul — Thu, 12 Mar 2009 20:30:40 +0000

"saw a tear fall from Raphael's eye"
Nice, moving the reader toward feeling compassion for the demons. I'm actually hoping Nybras can find redemption.

By: Miladysa

Miladysa — Thu, 12 Mar 2009 09:29:03 +0000

The second half of this chapter is one of my favourite parts of the story so far.

My favourite line?

"Nybras recalled the first time he had fallen."