Comments on: Hell on $5 a Day - Chapter 4

By: Walt Hum

Walt Hum — Sun, 21 Dec 2008 00:49:12 +0000

I think that the way it is allows the story to continue and still allow for a base to be laid.
I can't wait to keep reading.

By: JZ

JZ — Fri, 19 Dec 2008 02:47:45 +0000

I don't really make a point of reading stories with vampires, but I'm enjoying this one. I look forward to finding out what it's like when he goes to Hell.

Wow. How often do I get to say that?

By: Greg Bulmash

Greg Bulmash — Wed, 17 Dec 2008 05:35:28 +0000

I agree that the two chapters flip-flop chronologically, and there's a valid argument for flopping them back.

I'll share my reasoning for the sequence, though. Chapters two and three were "running and screaming" chapters. Five and six are "running and screaming" chapters. Four is a breather. It saves me from three "running and screaming" chapters in a row.

When you read five and six next week, four might seem better placed.

Anyhoo, we proceed fairly sequentially from here... with more running and screaming

By: Kelly

Kelly — Mon, 15 Dec 2008 22:19:28 +0000

Maybe, maybe not. It's difficult to be sure whether it's so disjointed because we're not reading it in sequence in one continous format, or whether its because it's just confusing. We'll see how we go. I tentatively suggest switching chapters too, or at least making it very, very obvious what is happening by, maybe, a sentence under the chapter heading? I'm still enjoying the story. There are many, many other published novels and authors that do not have that claim to fame. Good work.

By: Ryan

Ryan — Mon, 15 Dec 2008 17:28:50 +0000

Hey, I'm really enjoying the story so far, got me hooked after page 1. Would probably recommend though that you switch chapter three and chapter four around, would make more sense that way, as well as providing a bit more back story whilst covering that area. Other than that, keep up the good work!